Koinosu Icha Colaise (こいのす☆イチャコライズ) Review
When I was a kid, my father would rigorously review my homework—essays above all.
By “review” I mean I had to show him my essays first, he’d give suggestions for revision, and only once he was satisfied and I’d done enough editing could I hand it in.
Pretty unreasonable, right? A very paternalistic approach, right? But every coin has two sides—luckily my father happened to be a decent writer himself, so a lot of his feedback was actually useful.
The thing I remember most is what he said about narrative essays. Sometimes he’d flat-out call my writing “boring”—meaning it gave you no desire to keep reading. “You should give your story ups and downs, maybe even suspense, so people will want to keep going.”
“But the thing I’m writing about was just boring.” I think it was about giving up my seat to an old lady—“A Meaningful Event.”
“You can arrange the story a bit—like, you give up your seat but she flat-out refuses to sit at first, and only later explains she thinks she’s not that old yet, or something…”
“But that’s just making stuff up…”
“And giving up your seat isn’t making stuff up? Have you ever actually given up your seat?”
“…………”
